Evaluating an essay.

  Unfortunately, the writer struggled to make his points clear for the reader.  The essay we reviewed, would have been strong if the sentences held more structure and less awkwardness. 

Luckily, the writer addresses  arguments made my Dhrele to help support his topic sentence, with a well-fortified technique, using pathos and ethos. 

Yours truly, 

E-roc & Sandeezy

Purple Thumbs 1/26/11

Voters thumbs were stamped the color purple, as evidence that they had casted their vote in Iraq. Now a symbol of democracy, Iraqi men and women show off their purple thumbs to prove they casted their vote. 

Bricks and Walls,

E-Roc & Sandeezy

Productivity is the best activity, Creativity is an even better activity!

XoxO,

E-Roc & Sandeezy

January 25th, 2011

"On Facebook, more than 85,000 people have pledged to attend a nationwide antigovernment protest planned for Tuesday, Jan. 25, in Egypt."

The sentence shown above is the topic sentence from a article in Time Magazine, "Is Egypt About to Have a Facebook Revolution?". Found in the third paragraph, the sentence directly states what the reader is about to read. The rest of the paragraph, supports this topic sentence entirely, listing facts and informing the reader about the attempted online revolution in Egypt.

Yours Truly,

E-Roc & Sandeezy.

1/24 Erik Ramirez

Today in class we went over what our final and we discussed how to improve our writing skills. I learned that there you should be only one topic for every paragraph and to do this you must state the topic sentence and the rest of the paragraph should support it. We also discussed where a sentence should begin and end.

Hearts & Rockets,

E-roc